tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post1474959528135757909..comments2024-03-29T07:28:25.056+11:00Comments on Elephant's Child: WEP/ISWG August Challenge - A Change of HeartElephant's Childhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.comBlogger142125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-84150931558375313302018-09-07T07:36:05.031+10:002018-09-07T07:36:05.031+10:00Dee: Dear Dee, thank you so very much for such a ...Dee: Dear Dee, thank you so very much for such a generous comment. I love the thought of you continuing the story for yourself - and wonder where it will take you. Heartfelt thanks.Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-37312394305782484272018-09-07T06:13:44.443+10:002018-09-07T06:13:44.443+10:00Dear Sue, I've never been a science fiction fa...Dear Sue, I've never been a science fiction fan. The nuns didn't encourage it in grade and high school and my college offered no courses in it even though I was a Lit major. Harry Potter and Narnia is as far as I got into something beyond what's the norm.<br /><br />Having said that, I want to share with you my response to your story. It scared me. And I think that's why I don't read science fiction, because so often--I've heard--it projects a world that is foreign to what seems so essential to me--mercy and goodness and compassion and empathy.<br /><br />While a revulsion was developing in me to the goals of Nicholas and Samuel and the search for perfection (which, as you know from my convent memoir was my undoing), I found myself strangely fascinated by all this. Were we talking about humans or cats or cattle or just what? Were we on another planet or was this Earth at a future time? You had me asking questions about where the story was headed. The story was gripping my attention; I was revulsed but unable to stop reading.<br /><br />And then you introduce the change of heart and the beating of a heart that is caught up in the Oneness of all Goodness--the Oneness that connects us all into the deep depths of compassion and love. And you had me then, Sue. You had me! <br /><br />Now I can go on, in my own imagination, and think of how all this might end for Heart and for Nicholas and Samuel. There's a novel here. <br /><br />Thank you for sharing this. It's such a creative, imaginative, far-reaching piece of writing. Peace. Deehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00612299013780771262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-58148958606794036962018-08-27T09:24:50.626+10:002018-08-27T09:24:50.626+10:00Roland Clarke: Thank you so much. Since discover...Roland Clarke: Thank you so much. Since discovering the WEP challenge I have been blown away by the talented writers who participate, and by the generosity and kindness on offer.Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-55957308693095540972018-08-27T08:50:23.850+10:002018-08-27T08:50:23.850+10:00Well done getting deservedly shortlisted, Elephant...Well done getting deservedly shortlisted, Elephant's Child.Roland Clarkehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03302133565980901397noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-7002594032797435722018-08-27T04:56:23.209+10:002018-08-27T04:56:23.209+10:00Toi Thomas: Thank you so much. It was an honour....Toi Thomas: Thank you so much. It was an honour.Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-28732830200745280462018-08-26T22:56:15.005+10:002018-08-26T22:56:15.005+10:00Congratulations on being shortlisted for the Augus...Congratulations on being shortlisted for the August WEP challenge. Toi Thomashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07493934864387695248noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-11357207695083999192018-08-23T07:12:51.643+10:002018-08-23T07:12:51.643+10:00DMS ~Jess: Thank you. Perfection has no charm fo...DMS ~Jess: Thank you. Perfection has no charm for me. Which is just as well, because it is something I will never attain.Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-75461653953106073002018-08-23T01:53:44.496+10:002018-08-23T01:53:44.496+10:00What a powerful and intriguing piece. It pulled me...What a powerful and intriguing piece. It pulled me in right away- with so many underlining tones to things happening in the world today. I do love how it spotlights how ridiculous it is to expect or push children towards perfection. <br /><br />I certainly want to know more! What will happen next? Bravo!<br /><br />You are definitely a writer. :) <br />~JessDMShttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04202502753961748992noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-80390427883878287372018-08-20T19:06:32.798+10:002018-08-20T19:06:32.798+10:00Operation Awesome: Thank you. We live in a scary...Operation Awesome: Thank you. We live in a scary world don't we?Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-79026415561244487872018-08-20T18:56:44.177+10:002018-08-20T18:56:44.177+10:00What a thought-provoking and provocative piece. I...What a thought-provoking and provocative piece. I sends shivers up the spine. Well done!Operation Awesomehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04885316062405137882noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-67634168455547073922018-08-20T06:13:44.733+10:002018-08-20T06:13:44.733+10:00J Lenni Dorner: Thank you. I am not surprised th...J Lenni Dorner: Thank you. I am not surprised that there is a movie with a similiar theme. I suspect it was awful though.Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-21965236354656276742018-08-19T21:59:05.526+10:002018-08-19T21:59:05.526+10:00Excellent work here! I feel like I've seen a m...Excellent work here! I feel like I've seen a movie similar to this story. Some "B flick" with no major stars, maybe a made for tv type. I don't know, it just feels familiar to me. J Lenni Dornerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07961335286982498158noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-62433195960354460672018-08-19T15:25:30.617+10:002018-08-19T15:25:30.617+10:00Magic Love Crow: This is a truly lovely complimen...Magic Love Crow: This is a truly lovely compliment. Thank you. Lots.Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-82607484375918034262018-08-19T12:30:46.828+10:002018-08-19T12:30:46.828+10:00E.C, you know I'm not a writer, and I have to ...E.C, you know I'm not a writer, and I have to admit, I'm not really a reader, but this was SO COOL!!! Could you make this into a book? This was so written so well! Lots going on! Big Hugs! Magic Love Crowhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14133368208464734546noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-75670613380313619552018-08-19T11:38:03.725+10:002018-08-19T11:38:03.725+10:00Toi Thomas: Thank you so much. I am so very grat...Toi Thomas: Thank you so much. I am so very grateful for the kindness and generous support I receive.Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-6890784030123048402018-08-19T11:15:45.267+10:002018-08-19T11:15:45.267+10:00Sign me up for the next scene, the one after that,...Sign me up for the next scene, the one after that, and the one after that. I really enjoyed this story. Yes, it's a cool take on the prompt, but it's also a cool concept in general. Very well done. Toi Thomashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07493934864387695248noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-54428844354275250632018-08-19T08:19:49.008+10:002018-08-19T08:19:49.008+10:00Shannon Lawrence: Thank you. I am glad that the ...Shannon Lawrence: Thank you. I am glad that the premise tempts you. Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-59149557877491348492018-08-19T08:19:05.754+10:002018-08-19T08:19:05.754+10:00Roland Clarke: I am glad it makes more sense now,...Roland Clarke: I am glad it makes more sense now, and am already pondering ways to make it clearer still.<br />I really, really hope that the brakes can be applied to this particular train. Or the tracks blown up. Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-19977337628607462942018-08-19T08:02:07.946+10:002018-08-19T08:02:07.946+10:00Intriguing. I would read a much longer story of th...Intriguing. I would read a much longer story of this for sure. They don't know what they're getting themselves into.Shannon Lawrencehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00934641808195675935noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-82867433644581752442018-08-19T07:49:42.833+10:002018-08-19T07:49:42.833+10:00Okay, that para makes more sense now - I can be a ...Okay, that para makes more sense now - I can be a bit distracted. (I blame my neurological disorder LOL)<br /><br />Reading the other comments, I fear that many of us feel that we are some way down that path. A runaway train? Roland Clarkehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03302133565980901397noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-55409268094124146892018-08-19T05:37:39.842+10:002018-08-19T05:37:39.842+10:00Roland Clarke: I hope you are feeling better. An...Roland Clarke: I hope you are feeling better. And huge thanks to you too. That paragraph before Eight and Nine speak was designed as an explanation of why they couldn't talk out loud, or talk to the other Versions (which would severely limit any group plotting).<br />I worry (which IS one of my talents) that we are already some way down Samuel and Nicholas's path.Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-47452000328980322262018-08-19T05:35:04.894+10:002018-08-19T05:35:04.894+10:00Sandy: And a big thank you to you too. I was and...Sandy: And a big thank you to you too. I was and am awed by the inspiration and effort that writers bring to their craft. And so very grateful for those who put in the hard yards.Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-59637203487130991872018-08-19T05:33:45.154+10:002018-08-19T05:33:45.154+10:00Michelle Wallace: Thank you so much. I am predom...Michelle Wallace: Thank you so much. I am predominantly a reader, and writers have been my hero for many, many years.<br />I do hope that Nemesis and Justice triumph. Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-87041082738432665202018-08-19T04:49:59.630+10:002018-08-19T04:49:59.630+10:00First off you are a real writer if this is a taste...First off you are a real writer if this is a taste of what you can do. Twisted and clever, unlike the two scientists - they are just twisted, while their 'creations' are clever.<br /><br />I got confused by the last para before the telepathic italics, but that is probably just me.<br /><br />The piece seems frighteningly topical - the treatment of test subjects like cattle, and the belief that science is above ethics. Isn't too much of what happens today manipulative? You show that SF can be a mirror to society - a warning. Roland Clarkehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03302133565980901397noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7516733121956849207.post-36372884387802237952018-08-19T04:27:59.037+10:002018-08-19T04:27:59.037+10:00I would agree with others, you are a "real&qu...I would agree with others, you are a "real" writer. My SIL is also. Not a gift I have, but wish you well. I think it's awesome that writers, and would be writers have the blog platforms to practice or enjoy their craft vs back in the day when many people had stories in their heads, and dreams left un-fulfilled with relying only on "professional type publishing houses". Sandyhttps://4ccccs.blogspot.com/2018/08/afghans-shaws-toilet-paper-rolls-and.htmlnoreply@blogger.com