The WEP (Write, Edit, Publish) Challenge so generously hosted by Denise Covey and Yolanda Renee is back. Olga Godim and Nilanjana Bose have joined the team, providing welcome support to the doughty duo and a wealth of ideas.
In October, the WEP dedicates the month to the fantasy, fun, and horror of Halloween. This month the prompt is Dark Places - which gives us a LOT of scope. We are asked to create something from the prompt - and can do so through fiction, non-fiction, photography... Which leaves it wide open.
If you visit here and click on any names with a DL next to them you will be taken to some wonderful pieces. Life and inadequacy have stopped me participating in the last few challenges but I have read all of the submissions with awe and wonder. I will marvel at the other participant's skill, imagination and ingenuity this time too. NB: Our entries are to be posted on the 18th of October - which has arrived here. However half of the world hasn't got there quite yet. So please, don't discount those who don't have a DL following their name yet. It will come, and a revisit is definitely worthwhile.
We don't really celebrate Halloween here in Australia (despite the best efforts of commercial entities to get us on board) so I am, as usual, out of my depth.
Which hasn't stopped me. There are definitely some quiet and sneaky dark corners in my mind.
Without further ado...
In October, the WEP dedicates the month to the fantasy, fun, and horror of Halloween. This month the prompt is Dark Places - which gives us a LOT of scope. We are asked to create something from the prompt - and can do so through fiction, non-fiction, photography... Which leaves it wide open.
If you visit here and click on any names with a DL next to them you will be taken to some wonderful pieces. Life and inadequacy have stopped me participating in the last few challenges but I have read all of the submissions with awe and wonder. I will marvel at the other participant's skill, imagination and ingenuity this time too. NB: Our entries are to be posted on the 18th of October - which has arrived here. However half of the world hasn't got there quite yet. So please, don't discount those who don't have a DL following their name yet. It will come, and a revisit is definitely worthwhile.
We don't really celebrate Halloween here in Australia (despite the best efforts of commercial entities to get us on board) so I am, as usual, out of my depth.
Which hasn't stopped me. There are definitely some quiet and sneaky dark corners in my mind.
Without further ado...
Prestwich is a small town.
A quiet town. Some would dismiss it as an old-fashioned town. Hard work, responsibility and respect for
family and authority are its foundations and bed-rock. I love my adopted home and will work hard to
ensure it retains its values and traditions.
Halloween adds a frisson of excitement for us all. A time when over-excited children (too often
clad in inadequate and inappropriate costumes) romp in the chilly autumnal
dusk. As principal of the local school, I
echo the local police and make it very clear that their parents or an older
sibling should always be with them. In
the three years I have lived in Prestwich each year at Halloween at least one (two last year) of
my more wayward students has gone missing, never to be seen again.
I have a lot to do before the first children arrive. Preparedness and discipline define me. My usual skirt and tailored jacket is
replaced with sensible black woollen trousers and a matching warm sweatshirt.
I am good with my hands and make
quick and expert work of the mandatory carved pumpkin head. Screaming this year, with candles behind the
eyes. The children will expect and some will noisily demand
'treats'. Healthy minds are only found in healthy bodies so I cannot in
good conscience give them foods which are bad for them. Turning the
'apple for the teacher' adage on its head I set out bowls of carefully polished
apples, sugarless popcorn, a water jug and paper cups. There is, of
course, a receptacle for the waste.
No doubt some of them will not be
happy, but they know better than to complain in my hearing. They also
know better than to play any tricks on me.
My house is my sanctuary, my fortress
if you will, and I keep it private. They
will almost certainly not be invited inside.
Nevertheless, it is immaculately clean and tidy. The pumpkin pulp is quickly whisked away and
the knife washed, sharpened and replaced with the others gleaming in the knife
block. A place for everything and
everything in its place.
It was a very busy night and I saw an
almost constant stream of laughing, chattering little devils, ghosts, vampires,
clowns, zombies and witches. All of them were polite, thanked me for the
apples (though several chose not to take one) and arrived with either their
parents or an older brother or sister. I
had seen all of my final year students but one, the rebellious and self-willed Ebony
Paige. I was surprised not to have seen
her until her parents and sister told me that she had a sudden 'tummy upset'
and was home in bed. I expressed my sympathies and hoped that she
would be well enough to attend school tomorrow.
At eleven I hadn't seen or heard anyone
for half an hour. I was
considering calling it a night when an flimsily dressed vampire swooped up the
path. Alone. She had the vampire arrogance down to a
tee. 'About what I would expect. The mean bitch has no idea of fun. Well if she doesn't give us treats she gets
tricks' With that, she started hurling
eggs at my front door.
'Ebony Paige. You have recovered from your upset tummy I see.'
'Principal Skinner...'
'Should you be out so soon after your
illness?'
'Get real. Did you really think I was going to let your
stupid restrictions allow you and my parents to cramp my style? Really?
Not a happening thing '.
'I see.
Rules and basic honesty don't apply to you. Come with me.
In my kitchen you will find a bucket, detergent, hot water and a
scrubbing brush. The sooner you start,
the sooner you finish. And you will keep
cleaning until I am satisfied'.
It took her three grudging (and
initially half-hearted) attempts but the last of the egg was finally removed
from my door.
'I have finished now Principal
Skinner. Can I go now?'
'No.
We are not finished yet. The
bucket and brush you used also need cleaning' .
I close the heavy front door.
Quietly. Firmly.
Ebony has lied to her parents and been rude and disrespectful to
me. She has to learn her lesson. She will learn her lesson.
She does learn her lesson.
As an educator I can think of nothing I find more gratifying
than knowing that the eureka moment has been reached, and that the student will
never need that lesson repeated again..
My day's work is not yet done though. I too have some garbage disposal and cleaning
to do.
Her parents will probably think they miss her. By sparing the rod they have spoiled this
child. Perhaps they will be stricter
with her little sister. If not, it will
be my duty to step in again. As I did
last year, and the year before.
Full Critique acceptable.
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815 words.Full Critique acceptable.
Hi EC - a rather nasty surprise for Ebony ... so well written though ... and that horror of cleaning up first ... before the disposal-end time had come. How many like this ... and one in hand for next year ... Ghoulish remains somewhere ... well done - cheers Hilary
ReplyDeleteHilary Melton-Butcher: Definitely ghoulish remains somewhere. Probably nowhere they are going to be found though.
DeleteCongratulations on the win ...
DeleteHilary Melton-Butcher: Thank you. Totally unexpected, and it feels both undeserved and lovely (if that makes sense).
Deleteoo-ooo, love this story, absolutely love it! Satisfyingly creepy, with unexpected ending. And ditto the photo, I can imagine a soundtrack of howling werewolves. I'd never heard of WEP - going to check it out.
ReplyDeletecatmint: Thank you. I hope you enjoy WEP as much as I do. Though enjoy is not always the right term. This time particularly some stories are better read in the daytime.
Deleteha ha ... she doesn't 'get' Halloween.
ReplyDeleteAuthor R. Mac Wheeler: She finds Halloween useful and satisfying. Perhaps the townspeople don't 'get' Principal Skinner.
DeleteI couldn't help but think the child might go missing, based upon a previous paragraph; in our town we have a group candy give out in the town square which makes it safe for children.
ReplyDeleteLinda Starr: That would make things very difficult for Principal Skinner. Which she wouldn't like.
DeleteBut is the Kitchen still immaculate? ;)
ReplyDeleteRobert Bennett: Need you ask? It is now.
DeleteMy kitchen is the same, :)
ReplyDeleteCloudia: Mine isn't.
DeleteOh my, oh my. Ebony still comes back, year after year. Something is amiss, something is strange.
ReplyDeleteVery good!!!
Starting Over, Accepting Changes - Maybe: I don't think Ebony will be returning. And something is certainly amiss.
DeleteOne needs only to go into my dreams, Child, to go to the scary places.
ReplyDeletedonna baker: And mine.
DeleteInteresting story. Love the photo, very spooky.
ReplyDeleteJamie Ghione: The photo was taken on a much happier occasion - on our way to the balloon festival.
DeleteMove over Stephen King. You do spook REALLY well, EC.
ReplyDeleteSandra Cox: You are a shameless flatterer. Thank you.
DeleteGood short story! I like it!
ReplyDeleteSharon Quails: And a big thank you to you too.
DeleteHeHe, my we are strict. I wondered who would do the dirt. With Ebony cleaning her mess, I knew it had to be the principal unless Ebony had one more surprise up her sleeve.
ReplyDeleteAnn Bennett: The mess that Principal Skinner has to clean up is, or was, Ebony.
DeleteYou did a great job building the story. I enjoyed it thoroughly.
DeleteAnn Bennett: Thank you.
DeleteI wasn't sure where this was going, such a nice surprise! A place for everything and everything in its place. I ascribe to that motto! :) Nice subtle creep factor!
ReplyDeleteWe're so glad to have your writing participation, but are just as appreciative of your reading and comments, too! We love our fans as much as our writers!
Yolanda Renee: Thank you. I am much more comfortable as an appreciator.
DeleteYou may be more comfortable there, but you're an amazing writer, and we appreciate that immensely!
DeleteYolanda Renee: Megathanks. Some day I may believe that.
DeleteDitto Yolanda's remarks. You're our best follower in that you're always so supportive by commenting so widely and well. WEP would be lesser without the likes of you. I love that you've penned for us this month...and amazingly well too. I'll be back:-)
DeleteDenise Covey: Thank you so much for making this such a supportive challenge.
DeleteGreat stuff! Yu have spooky down to a tea dearie! X
ReplyDeleteAll Consuming: As Yolanda says, it is a subtle creep. Nasty, but subtle.
DeleteGood golly...I've got chills running up and down my spine...goosebumps....shivers. This is so well written and though out. Great job.
ReplyDeleteonly slightly confused: Thank you.
DeleteI kept waiting...I knew something was coming. And then BAM! It did. WOW!!!
ReplyDeleteDonna B. McNicol: Welcome and thank you. Too slow?
Deletejust slow enough, I say
Deletekylie: Thank you. I was trying to not give it away too early.
DeleteSinfully hilarious! Ah, what a treat you've bestowed. Thank you, EC. I SO enjoyed this.
ReplyDeleteRawknrobyn: Thank you.
DeleteLol. I loved this piece, EC. Poor child, though she deserved something...
ReplyDeleteMarie Smith: Her sins were so minor weren't they? Not in Principal Skinner's eyes.
DeleteMaybe candy and a smile, EC. Lol.
DeleteIt started off so tamely, then the twist at the end. Well done. I don't have an entry this time. Again.
ReplyDeleteRiver: I am frequently overawed and intimidated by the other contributors.
DeleteWow! Very, very nicely done.
ReplyDeleteAnd you are anything but inadequate.
Riot Kitty: Thank you. Wrestling with feelings of inadequacy is something I do often. And often.
DeleteThat evil teacher ate the girl? This is horrible. Nobody deserves to be eaten, no matter how disrespectful and rebellious they are. Poor, poor Paige.
ReplyDeleteGreat post!
Olga Godim: Principal Skinner didn't eat Ebony Paige. Or at least I don't think she did.
DeleteWhat happened to the girl then? Did the Principle send her somewhere? Where? I need to know or I'll be endlessly worried. :)
DeleteOlga Godim: Ebony is dead. Definitely dead. She was just too irresponsible for Principal Skinner's view of the perfect town.
DeleteEbony won't be around any longer. Hopefully her sister doesn't follow in her footsteps. One OCD educator I wouldn't want to cross.
ReplyDeletePat Hatt: Ebony is gone. Gone for good Principal Skinner would no doubt believe. Hopefully the younger sister is more amenable to authority. The whole town has been warned though.
Deletetight twisty tale that did go dark....
ReplyDeleteJoanne: It did a bit didn't it? It worries me a little how comfortable I am in Principal Skinner's head.
DeleteThis is a spooky treat! Love the quiet and dark humour. And your image is, as usual, beyond spectacular! Bravo!
ReplyDeleteNilanjana Bose: Thank you. As usual I feel out-gunned and out-classed and am so grateful for the warm and supportive comments.
Deleteoff with her head
ReplyDeleteor was that hands.
desk49: Or was her head hollowed out like a pumpkin? Only Principal Skinner knows.
DeleteWow EC...just Wow this was very good I really enjoyed this.
ReplyDeleteJimmy: Thank you.
DeleteI enjoyed that one, and reminds me that I dare not venture into any dark places that may scare me any time soon. Kudos EC! Hugs...RO
ReplyDeleteRO: Thank you. I hope all your paths are well lit. Hugs.
DeletePrestwich made me think of Prestatyn.
ReplyDeleteEbony and Principal Skinner are great names.
Inadequate? phooey
kylie: Prestwich had another name to begin with - but it belonged to a real town. I am pretty certain that Principal Skinner disliked and distrusted Ebony Paige from the beginning - just because of her name. It just doesn't fit with old school values...
DeleteI wonder if your town began as Pendle...?
ReplyDeleteAnd how long before the local policeman realises he needs help?
dinahmow: Not quite. I am wondering how long it will be too. Three teenagers gone in the preceding two years. Will Ebony's absence make the difference? Or is she 'just another runaway'?
DeleteI'm happy Ebony didn't go missing. I thought that was going to happen.
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed reading your WEP.
Shalom aleichem,
Pat Garcia
oh but she did!
DeletePat Garcia: Kylie is right. Ebony is dead.
DeleteWell done, E.C. Great story and perfect for the season. Huge congratulations on a story well written.
ReplyDeleteMason Canyon: Thank you.
DeleteI loved this, I suspected the principal right from the beginning, she just seemed like a suspicious character!
ReplyDeleteLaura Clipson: Suspicious? How can you say that? Principal Skinner has the town's best interests at heart...
DeletePrincipal Skinner has her OWN best interests at heart.
DeleteRiver: If asked, Principal Skinner would say (and believe) that she has the town's best interests at heart. Which is where the problem lies.
DeleteI absolutely loved it! I wasn't sure if she was going to be a true vampire or if she was going to be "schooled." I also loved your voice in this tale. Well done!
ReplyDeleteElsie
Elsie Amata: If only this vampire had paid more attention at school she might have been safe. Thank you.
DeleteYou won't catch me arguing with Principal Skinner. No sir.
ReplyDeleteSandra Cox: Wise move.
DeleteYou did a wonderful job of capturing her character. The chill beneath the staidness.
DeleteCharacter development is challenging, but you nailed it.
Sandra Cox: Coming from a prolific author that comment means a lot to this dabbler. Thank you.
DeleteYikes, so scary!! I cracked up a little since who can blame the Principal for not being able to tolerate bratty teens? We've all been there but I guess she does take it a little far.
ReplyDeleteThe line about Ebony's parents probably thinking they miss her gave me the chills!
Julie Flanders: Thank you. There isn't a lot of compassion in Principal Skinner. Or flexibility.
DeleteBut I'm betting she has a fantastic insinkerator!
Deletedinahmow: Oh yes. Industrial strength. Like her knives.
DeleteI had my suspicions about the Principal. Yikes. A scary one. I wish Ebony could turn the tables on her though,mean old witch.
ReplyDeleteDeborah Drucker: Too late...
DeleteWhat a perfect story for the season! :-)
ReplyDeleteCarrie Ann Golden: Welcome - and thank you.
DeleteDark one, it sounds like I wouldn't to live there. OOOOOOOOOOOOO
ReplyDeleteBob Bushell: If you stick to Principal Skinner's rules you would be fine...
DeleteI'm rooting for the principal.
ReplyDeleteShe is evil, yes. I know. But still....
DeleteSusan Kane: I was surprised at just how comfortable I was in her head. And evil is such a perjorative term. Principal Skinner firmly believes that the town benefits from her work. And gives clear warnings...
DeleteYou definitely score on the creepy factor! I have a feeling that Principal Skinner has a lovely garden. All thanks to her "special" kind of mulch.
ReplyDeleteMarty K.
Marty K.: I use copious quantities of blood and bone on my garden too...
DeleteMwahahaha. ;)
DeleteRight after I wrote my comment, I watched a TV crime show in which the murder victims were used as mulch (and it wasn't Fargo!). Eerie coincidence!
-MK
Marty K: Coincidences are OFTEN eerie.
DeleteLove it! Written with your dark humor and snark. :)
ReplyDeleteRiver Fairchild: Your support has been invaluable. I think that dark humour is more integral to me than my backbone...
DeleteSuch a twisted take on the missing kids' syndrome.A principal pied piper who buries the little rotters! I think I'd avoid your house, for sure. . .
ReplyDeleteD.G. Hudson: I haven't killed anyone. Really I haven't. My house is safe, unlike Principal Skinner's.
DeleteWhat an ending. I guess some may think the kids deserve it, but of course, they don't. Perhaps the principal will enjoy the rest of the evening on her broomstick.
ReplyDeleteNancy
N.R.Williams: No, being a teenager and rebellious isn't a death penalty offence. At all.
DeleteWhoa, Sue, you've outdone yourself here. What a great story, told so innocently, until, wham, you bring us to the realization that this lady isn't all sweetness and light. Far from it. Poor Ebony. So while she hides in plain sight, no one has an inkling what this devious one is up to in her perfectly-cleaned house.
ReplyDeleteA fantastic Halloween tale.
Denise :-)
Denise Covey - Author: It came to me that Principal Skinner doesn't think of herself as evil, or even devious. I think she would talk about tough love, serial killer though she is.
DeleteGreat story, love the normalcy that leads to other, more sinister things.
ReplyDeleteSally: Thank you. I am really glad that I could convey that she thinks of herself as normal...
DeleteFascinating tale EC and well told. Fitting for this time of the year.
ReplyDeleteDenise inVA: Thank you. I hope you checked out some of the other contributors work. Wordsmiths at their best.
DeleteYowza! Dynamite, Sue. And suitably dark. You did a great job developing the principal into a believable character. (The murderous ol' biddy!)
ReplyDeleteSusan: Thank you. I hope that she was believable and that the clues I planted weren't too heavy handed.
DeleteOh my, I think I know where the missing children have been going! It pays to be good and kind indeed around that principle! I'm just back from vacationing, but this is just up my Halloween delight in all things BOO-rific! A lovely description of place and visions! Glad that wasn't my school! Hehehe. Bravo, much enjoyed.
ReplyDeleteKaren S.: Thank you. I don't think Principal Skinner would notice kindness but it is certainly safer to obey rules around her...
DeleteLoved how normal it seemed with the dark thread woven into it so subtly. Awesome.
ReplyDeleteM.Pax: I have been grateful for the kind comments received by many accomplished authors - you included. Thank you.
DeleteYou did so well with this story! Creepy!!
ReplyDeleteMagic Love Crow: Thank you.
DeleteI admire principal Skinner. Once an educator, always an educator. No student will ever forget her. :)))
ReplyDeleteCaterina: Some of her lessons are even positive ones.
DeleteBeing an educator you will rule so many hearts dear E.C!
ReplyDeletei am glad today i i was here to read your wonderful post through which now i know you better.
Best wishes to you and family
baili: Thank you. I am glad you liked my story - but it is fictional.
DeleteHope your weekend is filled with wonder, EC.
ReplyDeleteSandra Cox: Thank you. Work and wonder. I hope yours is a joy.
DeleteFor someone who doesn't celebrate Halloween- you really wrote a great creepy story. What a principal! :)
ReplyDelete~Jess
DMS ~Jess: Thank you. I am really glad that you enjoyed it.
DeleteCongratulations on your win, EC!! I wasn't surprised at all to read that you won because this story is so fantastic with such a memorable twist. Congrats!!
ReplyDeleteJulie Flanders: Thank you. I was more than surprised. Indeed when I got the email I thought that Yolanda had sent it by mistake.
DeleteNot too slow (from my previous comment), it kept the tension at just the right level.
ReplyDeleteHuge congratulations on your win!!!!
Donna B. McNicol: Thank you - on both counts. I really would hate to be in the judges shoes. I thought so many of the stories were amazing.
DeleteCongratulations!! Excellent story.
ReplyDeleteI've always said you can't trust perfection.
Elizabeth Seckman: Welcome and thank you. You can certainly trust me on that basis. No perfection here. Ever.
DeleteDang, you write well! That was deliciously dark. (How did I somehow miss this earlier?!) Congrats on the well-deserved win!
ReplyDeleteEllen: Thank you. I suspect you missed it because of the far from delicious darkness in your life. Hugs.
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